Words do matter.

Our lives begin to end the day we become silent
about things that matter~ martin luther king
Words heal..
Words reassure..
Words express...

It happened... and I am glad it did


A/N- This one fiction is pretty long to be called short story. I would recommend if you get a coffee mug and then sit to read, so that when you feel sleepy you can sip it along. Caffeine doesn’t lets you sleep no matter how boring the read be. ^_*
And further I would suggest readers to abide by the age discretion of 16+.






Glancing one last time in the mirror of my scooter, I headed upstairs to his apartment. Actually his apartment became 'his' this morning only. To be precise, he has just shifted to city again this morning only, that too after spending 3 years miles away in Bangalore.

Wait! Did I even tell you whom am I rambling about since the whole time? Oh! Introducing Mayank, my best friend, my worst friend and secret holder and blah blah blah! We had been together since the class 7th but then his father got transferred to Bangalore after our 12th grade. Until 12th we were just good friends like we all have some, its after 12th when he moved away and we started talking regularly on phones, through facebook or mails.


We became best of friends. By the way, it's scientifically proved that women are more extroverts in virtual world, maybe that's the reason I was able to open up more on this long distance relationship.

Ok, now I stand on the threshold of his apartment after knocking for the third time, waiting for him to open the door. Man! He is so lazy, no doubts. But I guess it wasn't his mistake when I decided to drop at his doorstep when I know he'll be busy unpacking and setting up his place. Just when I was about to knock again he opened the door, with his one and only trade-mark frown on 22-year-old-grumpy face of his.

"Wonder when I'll be invited with a smile instead of this" I said easing the frown lines on his forehead. 

He chuckled and pulled me into the world's warmest hug. "That's because I wasn't expecting anyone yet, but then you always have all the rights to be the exception."

"I missed you"

"Really? Sorry but feelings aren't mutual then because I had the best of my time in Bangalore without you hanging around my neck all the time" I hit him on his shoulder and pulled back from hug.

"When do I keep hanging on your neck?" I pushed him aside and walked past him into his 1 bedroom apartment, where all his stuff was still lay packed in brown boxes except few clothes that lie down here and there and some furniture like bed, couch, study and dressing. "Not bad. It's quite spacious. But just like you- very dull and lifeless type" I said checking out his place while he stood there near the door smiling at me.

"I still don't believe you are actually here in front of me after 3 years." he said somehow dreamily and I liked it too. "I had given up on hopes to ever see you again in near future... But then this is destiny"

I ran up to him and hugged him again, this time tighter than earlier. "I missed you too" he said in same dreamy voice I wonder if he has habit of talking in sleeps because he isn't this sweet always.

I broke the hug and started pacing the room helping him unpack and make the room look like actual room from a mess, as it was when I came. While emptying the box with his clothes I noticed most his clothes to be blue. I knew it was his favorite color but I didn't know he was so fond of it. After about 2-3 hours of cleaning, unpacking, setting, fighting, annoying and leg pulling we were done. The next glance around was a room with a bed in center, dressing and 
study at left and a small balcony at right. It was a tough task but then every nice thing takes something to happen at first!

I prepared coffee for us and he did the other setting in the small kitchen along with talking and remembering the older times together.

We went to balcony to have coffee in some peace standing by the railing, watching the kids play in the opposite park.

"So how did you manage to sneak out from your home for this long?" he asked as he went inside to place his cup after finishing off his coffee.

I giggled remembering what I did to reach here "I asked Ruchi to call me at my home and ask my mom for permission to come to her house for 5-6 hours. She told my mom she has to discuss some concepts regarding 'the induction motor' working." I chuckled "Like I know how it actually works."

"Oh so you fooled aunty again! You won't ever give up your tactics, will you?" he said while he stood next to me in balcony fixing the branches of his favorite touch-me-not plant.

"Well, I can't until they themselves allow me to go wherever I want. They have no problems with the fact that you are my best friend but they still don't allow me to go and meet you. That's called double standards. Or maybe they don't trust me enough" I said while placing my cup aside on the table in balcony.

"Or maybe they don't trust me with you" he winked.

"You pathetic jerk" with this he received a blow on the back of his head, while we had the laugh of our life times.

The next half hour was passed in absolute silence while both the souls were busy watching the hustle-bustle in the opposite park where a pair of lovers was busy arguing, maybe on some good for nothing issue, but still that scene was quite intriguing. It was when I actually realized that beauty of love relationship is in these small fights when we can openly accuse our partner even if there's no fault of them. This is such an interesting fact. 

Smiling wholeheartedly after a brief conversation with my heart I glanced sideways at my companion for the moment. He too was smiling maybe thinking about the same thing. After all we are best friends, frequency of our thinking matches too. 
"Cute! Isn't it?"

He turned his gaze towards me still smiling the same way. "It surely is. Very cute." He pinched my cheek and added "just like you"

"Am I a teddy... teddies are cute?" I pouted while he grinned.

"Yes you are. My sweet little cutie pie teddy, with cuppy cake cheeks" he bent down and pecked my cheek. 

I forced a smile until he disappeared in room to fix some work. I once again turned my attention towards the arguing couple; but this time I wasn't aware of what they were doing as all my brain machinery was coagulated with thoughts of my own apprehensions, my apprehensions towards a man's touch. 

I would never mind hugging or even cuddling with my bestie but it was the first time he ever kissed me and somehow, unknowingly I did felt some tingling sensation with that temperate touch.

It doesn't mean I haven't ever been touched by anyone ever. I did have a boyfriend, back in 9th class, Nisheet. Initially he was a good friend of Mayank as well as me but after a small courtship of 4 months and 27 days we moved apart because his family decided to shift to another state and he possibly didn't believe in long-distance relationship, unlike me.

In whole of this almost 5 months of relation all we shared that could be categorized as physical touch was occasionally holding hands, twice a kiss on hand and once a kiss on cheek-that too when we met for the last time. I know I m not supposed to memorize things like that but I can't help, I always had issues regarding a man's touch. I just go numb whenever it's something like an intimate touch but with Mayank, somehow it WASN'T the numbness but something else, something new. Okay, I know I shouldn't feel like this about my best friend, I shouldn't mutilate the beauty of this exquisite relation with my confused feelings and damned 'tingling sensation'.

"I guess they have sorted out their differences by now" his voice snapped me out my reverie of deep thoughts. I traced the direction of his sight and caught the initially 'arguing couple' kissing shamelessly sitting in a seclude corner of the park. "And you were probably enjoying the free show. Eh?" he nudged me teasingly.

While I was floating deep inside my inner issues, I had been caught shamelessly gawking at an equally shameless kissing couple.

I turned around hastily, finding excuses to justify my mistake. "I-I wasn't looking at them. I was just’ just'" I stammered while my cheeks felt hot due to blood rushing in them. God! This is so embarrassing.

"Ahh' you want me to believe that you were busy doing something else when you had censured scenes playing LIVE in front of you?" he raised his eye brows mischievously making me blush even harder. "Don't be embarrassed sweetheart, if we can watch them fight then we deserve all the rights to see them patching up too" his giggles sounded so teasing.

"Shut up you' I wasn't looking at them" I said all irritated by his continuous teasing eyes.

"And you think I'll believe?" he can be so annoying at times.

"Argh' I hate you! I hate you so much" I raised my fist to punch his chest but to my hard luck he caught my wrist in time.

"Awww' feeling is mutual sweetheart" he grinned and placed a quick kiss on my other cheek.

All my anger vanished at once as my apprehensions and insecurities came rushing again. This time yet again instead of numbness I felt different. Somewhat like butterflies in stomach, that fluttered every time he did this, twice so far. I felt color creeping over my neck towards my cheeks' yet again.

I looked up in his eyes but I couldn't see any of what I was feeling right now. He was still looking at me unperturbed by the turmoil I was feeling right now. Is it possible he felt nothing different about this gesture?

Watching him flash his genuine smile, I was reassured that there wasn't any need to worry. Suddenly everything seemed to fall in place, like a magic, it felt so natural and certain, like it was bound to happen at some point of time. It didn't felt as odd or inappropriate, just a bliss.

"Come on lets eat something, I am starving after moving so much of stuff. I don't know how mom manages all this!" he dragged me along with him towards the couch. There lay 2 bowls with steaming maggi in them.

"Wow! When did you cook this?" I rambled taking one bowl in my hands and sitting comfortably on couch with my legs pulled up.

"Well, when you were busy peeping into someone's private moments!" didn't I said he is super annoying at times.

"I. Was. Not" I said from clenched teeth.

"Don't tell me you missed out on such a golden opportunity!"

"Shut up! Will you? Let me enjoy my maggi in peace" and finally someone actually kept his mouth shut while I had my gala time with my mouth watering MAGGI! Yummy!

I was done polishing my bowl in 2 minutes. I don't care if maggi can be cooked in 2 minutes, as they claim in advertisement, or not; but I can always finish it off in 2 minutes or even less!

I placed my bowl back and looked at him who was unusually staring at me with lost expression. I hope he isn't sleeping with open eyes. I know my friend was a weirdo but if it's true it's going to be the limit! "What?" no response. I bet he is sleeping. I clicked my fingers in front of his eyes. God! He is smiling now. Crazy! "What are you looking at so intently?"

He took a deep breath, as if deciding something and then nodded. "Come here, I have to tell you something" I obediently obliged and sat next to him waiting for him to tell me 'something'. He placed his arm around me and leaned back on couch. The way he was taking time was frustrating and getting me more curious about that 'something'. "Okay, listen. First you have to promise that you won't ask any questions until I complete, I know it's quite difficult for a chatter box like you to stay quiet, but you can always try." He winked at me just to get a slap on his arm. "Ok sorry, serious now." I nodded in affirmation telling him to start.

"You remember the day back in 9th when you had told me that you and Nisheet were together now?" I nodded again, although I just remembered the bits of that day. "That day was a big milestone in my life and that all because of you." I raised my eye brows in confusion but he hushed me even before I could open my mouth to question. "No questions please. I am explaining. Since a long a time before that day I was going through a great confusion, a confusion regarding my feelings for you. Firstly I discarded it as attraction but then over the time instead of vanishing they grew; I started feeling strongly for you. It was definitely not just attraction, something else, something strong. After long discussions with my inner self I reached the conclusion of confessing it you, whatever it was. I was ready to face with honesty but then again I was worried about our friendship. What if you don't approve of my feeling? What if you walk away forever? Keeping all the doubts aside I finally gathered courage to tell u that I was falling for you, I was clueless of what was going on between you and Nisheet. That day, when you told me about you both being together, I had decided to confess it all to you the same day. It's fate. Even before I could approach you to tell you about all this I ran in into Nisheet and blurted out all of it in nervousness. If I had a bit clue about you both I would have never done that blunder, again my hard luck." He paused to take a deep breath while I gaped in space trying my best to let the huge amount of information sink in. It was damn difficult.

"After that when I reached unto you, before I could place my heart out you shot the news of you being with Nisheet. I felt nothing, not even pain, not even happiness for you. I was shattered; my first love had gone unreciprocated. That's it. After that I preferred being far from you, tried to indulge myself in studies and move on. I was successful in that too. But when in 10th I got to know that Nisheet has left the school I again felt all the feelings rushing back but yet again I suppressed it knowing you two must be together still, since distances don't affect love, that's what I believed and still do. Maybe it was my insecurities that kept me from coming to you and talk like earlier times." He sighed and continued. "After that I had to move to Bangalore; I used to have an urge to contact you once, that's when I searched you on face-book and luckily had a way out. All that followed is known to you. That's it"

I was too stunned to even react. It felt like whole world came crashing down on me. I continued gaping in space until he broke the silence again. "Are you going to run away or what?"

"I want to' but I am unable to move" I whispered back, that was all I could manage at the moment. How come I never questioned his sudden disappearance from my life? How come I never got to know he felt so strongly about me, maybe strongly then what I ever felt for Nisheet? He slid his arm on my waist and pulled me back towards him. I rested my head on his shoulder and lay back on couch still deep in my thoughts world. "Why did you decide tell me now?" 

"I always wanted to tell you all this because deep in my heart I knew it was unfair on your part to not know about how someone feels for you. I felt like a thief to keep it to me but then I wanted to tell you all this face to face not through an electronic media."

Again maintaining my silence for about 2-3 minutes I asked what had been bothering me since I got to know the whole thing. "You said 'loved', 'felt'' is it all about the past or is there' anything yet?"

He took few seconds to answer "I don't know. After getting you back after so long time I was happy the way it was. I didn't give it thought. I was scared to lose the existing friendship we had. I was again insecure' I don't know." He shrugged and concluded the answer to the question that mattered most to me in confusion. I nodded to acknowledge his answer but turmoil inside only increased. "Forget it now. Let's talk about something else." He rubbed my arm but it wasn't able to soothe my confusion.

"Things could have been so different only if that day I would have let you talk first. Today I really repent on my excessive speaking habit."

"I don't think so. It's not like you would have accepted me the way you accepted Nisheet at that time."

"It is. It wasn't like I had some deep secret crush on him. It all just happened in the sequences of occurrences' a coincidence. All I wanted then was to feel loved cared' desired. I trusted you, why wouldn't I approve of it. I would have, surely and happily"

"I would just say, what ever happens, happens for the good. Maybe it was meant to be this way only"

"Hmmm' maybe" now things seemed much in place and right form. It somehow felt relaxed.

After a long stretched silence he spoke "What would be your answer if I tell you that I still feel the same way about you?" I raised my gaze and met his. Looking deep into his eyes I could feel the depths of honesty, purity and deep seated love. How could I have failed to see all that earlier? I have been such a loser, a big fool. "My feelings for you never changed, I was just afraid to tell you earlier but now I want to know. Will you accept me now the way I am'. And my feelings?" he whispered. All his words felt no less than a caress. 'Yes, I would' I wanted to say but my throat went dry leaving me helpless. I gulped the lump of final confusion and nodded meekly, answering the most important question of my life without any words.

His lips twitched into a small smile that was enough to fill my heart with warmth. For a few seconds we kept gazing into each other's eyes until his face started descending on me. I knew it was the moment; all of a sudden panic struck me. My breathing became uneven knowing what might follow now. I had my eyes shut holding his collar tightly in my fist. My apprehensions were still coming in the way but I knew it was the time to get over them. I felt his lingering breath on my face micro seconds before his lips brushed on mine. Giving me enough time to calm down, he ultimately covered my mouth with his, filling me with warm sensations in my stomach.

His kiss wasn't rushed or passionate or demanding but calm and promising; A promise to be there forever, a perfect way to seal the blissful moment. Freeing his collar from my hand he entwined his fingers with mine. The kiss lasted for about 15-20 seconds, which was enough to get me in daze. I hid my face in the curve of his neck, breathing heavily; then I realized I involuntarily have held my breath all along the beautiful moment. I couldn't look up at him, one, because I was suddenly too shy too face him, two, I knew my face was red by now because of the lack of breathe and shyness; and I certainly not wanted him to see me like this. I just had had the most beautiful moment of my life, my FIRST KISS; I almost felt flying in high raised sky. I parted from him but kept my eyes lowered. How was I supposed to face him after sharing an intimate moment with him just moments ago?

"Do I still need to say the words?" he asked in a mere whisper. To which I could only reply by shaking my head, while my heart was beating with the speed of a jet. "But I want to hear something from you" his grip on my waist tightened some more.

"I' I need to leave"

"Wow! How romantic! 'I need to leave' huh!" I smiled at his annoyed face and pinched his cheek affectionately. He looked so cute pouting.

"I really need to leave now. Mom must have been waiting, it's already 9." I tried to get out of his hold but in vain. He was no where near to be ready to leave me.
"No, you are staying here"

"What? No, I am not"

"Oh yes! You are. Don't you trust me enough or are you having doubts on my intentions?" he asked mischievously. I smacked him on his arm feeling embarrassed on his playful remarks. I knew him well enough to know his intentions; I couldn't ever imagine him disgracing me in any way ever, not even in my worst nightmare.

"I trust you, but how can I stay here? No, I can't"

"You can. Don't you go on sleepovers at your friend's places?"

"I did only once, at Ruchi's place. I am not allowed much"

"Okay. Call up your mom and tell her that you are staying at Ruchi's place tonight. You told her that you are there right now. So just tell her you going to stay."

"No. I won't lie again. And besides I don't have my night wear here. No, no way." I tried again only to try my luck.

"Come on. Please." He pleaded with cutest ever puppy face "please with a cheery on top. I swear I won't do anything and you can wear my t-shirt and pajamas for the night, I won't mind it"

I thought for a while before answering "okay, but what if my mom doesn't even allow me to stay at Ruchi's as per her information." I still tried for the last time.

"Tell Ruchi to ask for permission from your mom too, I am sure she'll agree" I called up Ruchi to do what he suggested and to his wish my mom agreed to let me stay at Ruchi, only if she knew where I was going to stay. Even Ruchi told me to think twice before staying with him, no matter she trusted him too but still she had her doubts, after all she too cared for me, pretty too much. But I cleared her doubts with my reassurance, or at least I tried to. Finally after half and a quarter hour we were done with convincing my mom and Ruchi.

"Finally!" he let out a long sigh slumping on the bed after putting the phone aside.

"Now, what I am supposed to do after all this?"

"What do you want to do?" he winked mischievously. God! He knows well how to embarrass me to peaks.

"Just shut up! Will you? Now give me some t-shirt of yours I want to change" nodding he got up and pulled out a t-shirt and a pajama from his cupboard. I took them from him and went into the bathroom.

After freshening up, when I re-entered the room I found him lying on the edge of bed reading a book, with his head resting on the head board. He looked up from the book, his eyes scanning me from toe to head; his eyes held the same mischief that I knew were used to make me self-conscious. "I must say, you look great in borrowed clothes!" I gave him a deathly stare, which he ignored and continued "come here, I have to show you something" shaking my head I obliged and went up to him.

"What?"

"How rude? Give me your hand. I won't show it until you behave fine with me" sighing I gave in into his childish tactics, but I loved it too, to say honestly. Once holding my hand his simple smile turned into a mysterious smirk and with a one pull by him I was lying flat on him. In another second he rolled on his side pulling me beneath him. I was so shocked on the sudden turn of events and' scared too. 

"What are you doing?"

"What does it looks like?" still smirking he raised his eye brows teasingly. I knew him too well to fall for his tricks. I decided to play along, one, because I trusted him, two, even I wanted to know how it felt to be loved by the person I am used to fight with almost everyday. "I am trying to take advantage of a alone girl whom I have captured in my room for the whole night"

"Really! What if the poor girl shouts?"

"I can take care of that too" 

"Okay and how will you 'take care' of it?"

"Just like this" saying so he pressed his lips on mine not even giving me time to breathe once. My hands gripped his shoulders tightly before moving towards his back, while his hands were busy caressing my waist giving me tickling sensations. He was pulling me in him with all his might. His one hand reached the back of my head pushing it into him, deepening the kiss even more. Unlike our first kiss this one was much much passionate and demanding. I pushed him a little to let him know that I was breathless! Even the most passionate kissers need air and it was my second experience only!

He parted his lips from mine breathing equally heavily as me. "Like'. This'" he said in between his gasps. I pushed on his chest trying to get him off me but he was quite heavy for me to move and besides I wasn't trying much. Finally, he voluntarily rolled off to other side still his breathe coming in loud gasps.

"I guess you were going to take advantage of some opportunity!" this time I thought of getting naughty, because I was well aware of his so-called 'evil intentions'.

"I bless you with my mercy for the night" he said in a boastful voice and then started laughing and I joined him too. We laughed hard on the romantic cum humorous moment we shared. "You sleep on right side and I'll sleep on left" he smiled before spreading the covers on me. "And don't worry, I won't cross my limits" he placed a kiss on my forehead and shifted to his side. I respect him for respecting the beauty for this new found relation. We kept a distance of 2 and half feet between us when we slept, but it wasn't same in the morning when I was awakened by the piercing sun rays through the balcony side.

Waking up with his arms wrapped around my stomach, his chest pressed on my back and his breathe fanning my neck and shoulder was the most eternal thing I ever felt; A perfect start of a perfect day. Just the way it should have been.

He is the most wonderful thing ever happened to me and I am so glad that it happened. For me love couldn't have happened more perfectly. And the best thing is it's just the start to the wonderful phase of life, full of love.

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NOTEI know many of you will think it’s inappropriate to lie to our mothers for any reasons. Believe me, I am too in the same category, I oppose the idea of lying to parents but its a fiction and I am taking some liberties being the author. Hope you understand. I owed this explanation to all of you.


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56 Opinions:

hey!

i have read this at india forums too.
ur work is awesome!!!

i love this work....

keep writing more and more please!

love
sonali

 

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freaking loved it!

that was so sweet... i totally loved the way Ankit gradually unfolded his love for u.... this is so so sooooooooooooo sweet!

i m mesmerised with all the things u wrote, the expressions, fights, bickering, silence....

the first kiss was just so heavenly... seriously!!!!

LOVED IT!

i again repeat... L.O.V.E.D. I.T.


do write more soon!

 

@Sonali- Thank you. I remember u commenting on IF too.

@Redroses- Thank you soooo much. Btw this ISN'T my real life story, i mean there's no such Ankit in my life... as of yet. Thanks again.

 

Deeps, I'm so glad you opened your own blog. And what a beautiful title!!! Words do matter, don't they?

Wow, I read this one again today and I'm glad I did! :) I LOVE THIS OS TO BITS. This piece of writing shows how much you have grown as a writer. You write amazingly well dear. I wish you would write more soon. I can wait for some months, but after that, I request you to write more and continue your unfinished FF too.

Love u Deeps :)
Keep Smiling

Yours
Deeds

 

DeedS!!
You here!.. I am so so happy... Thank you so much!
yes, words do matter.. Somewhere u too have been the reason for the title, words seriously matter in relations like ours.. Long distance.

I promise to complete my fiction once I m done with my exams.. And I am going to do it only for u coz u have been the only one asking for update :)... It makes me feel special. Thank you

love u too..
yours
Deeps

 

this is so sweet. i wish it was true. the best love story ever. do write more soon.

 

seriously amazing story...!!! I mean it makes the reading purely worthwhile... Also gave me some insight as to how a gal feels when a guy pops up the question..lol...
keep writing..!!! eager to read more from you..!! (deep down,i have a hint that part of it is true...fanatsies aren't this beautiful..they are more ideal..)
try reading
http://dreamylives.blogspot.com/2010/02/most-beautiful-girl-ever.html

 

I agree fantasies aren't that beautiful as reality but unfortunately or fortunately this isn't true...

 

Deepu..Beautiful group first of all!!Words do matter..Yes they do..some words can actually change a person..
Coming to your ff..hard core romance in next half..and beautifully woven..Could actually visualise everything!!Hats off to ya..Keep writing..guess u have left forum..btw dont stop writing as had said to u..and u will cont love makes life simple or...na?
Love ya!!Hugs!!!Missing ya badly!!!

 

Hey Dipsy Doll,
Its beautiful! Its actually amazing!
Direct from your heart, hain na?
Do keep writing,

CONGRATS!!! for your own new blog!
I am eagerly waiting to read more!
Its realistic!

Take care :)
Love yaa...

 

ok! then i wish u'll get ur's soon! :)

 

HEY DEEPIKA..
Its simply amazing story yaar..i'm totally shocked ,surprised,stunned after reading ds love story,its sounds soo real..as i started i was gettng more and more into it..the title is totally appropriate and the story is out of d world..i was nt at all havng any idea dt you are such a good writer dear..hats off to you..nd nw i m eagerly waiting to read more and more..pls.keep writing.. nd thnx for such a beautiful lovestory..!!!

 

@ madhu- thanku so much honey! maybe i might have never dared to write openly as here. thanku for encouragement.
i said i won't write till aieee exam is done.. but then i hv writeen sumthng more. yupp i'll continue my fiction too. missed you too.

@sammy- hehe.. ya direct from heart. love ya too.

@redroses- thanku

@manisha-thanku di, yupp surely writing more.

 

Its a beautiful story.Friendship turning in2 luv was so beautiful.Mayank does'nt know tht Nupur also luvs him.His touch makes her realize her luv 4 him which she neva felt she had 4 her ex-bf.Union of MaYur was lovely

 

thanks... i m glad u liked it.

 

U sud start workin on a collection of short stories . I don't know about others bt i will buy 1 copy ...
Nice flow ,not a thriller yet gripping

carry on

 

Beautiful piece. A strong narrative with lots of intimacy. Yes, it is beautiful. I have no words, its simple and elegant. Nice wordplay.

Cheers,
Blasphemous Aesthete

 

hey! yaar tune iska second part update kiya tha, as per my info in blog, then tune use delete kyun kiya?

 

Again a very nice write up from your side. Till end i was thinking that it is ur true story and i was feeling that, you both are really lucky that after such a long distance u both got each other but in the end you said its fiction. Anywz it was awesome!
Keep writing

 

@sunwicked- oh... u really think so?... m surprised.. still thanks for ur words.

@anshul- oh u read it... its like, it was a try on intimacy for first time...

@mahak- i told u the issue.

@suresh wadhwani- thanku :)

 

ye sab filmo me hota hai deepika ji asal zindagi me nhi. i m sure u r makin tings up......

 

I never said its real.. In fact i have written in the starting note that its a fiction.. Purely. And yes, ye sab filmo mein hi hota hai..

 

to mohtarma is pyaar ke dard se guzar chuki hai.... ;)

 

@deepika- u shud rite sm reality also. u r gud wit fiction......btw apart frm rittin if u lyk readin also here is d link 4 my blog. m sure u ll lyk it... :) :)

http://emotionsunleased.blogspot.com/

http://boring-stuff-by-boring-people.blogspot.com/

 

Well i had tried penning reality too.. Here's the attempt if you may wish to go through..
Maybe
as for reading... I love reading and i will surely visit your blogs once i get free of my pre-occupied situation. I am looking forward to read your work.

 

Ha! that was something D..

First of all thank you for the dedication! Hugs for you, sweetheart!!!!

And ha! The OS!!! 9 pages in MS word eh?

Kay! So the OS was just outstanding!! everything from them being online friends and then meeting up at 'his' place which became 'his' only this morning!

Mayank's fav colour is blue? ;;)

I love Maggi!!!!!!!!!!! Written wonderfully well bud! it comes very naturally to you! you are great!

And the kisses....Oooooooooooh!!!! Sweet and passionate!

Could just imagine everything like a movie!! Lovely!!!!

I loved their repartee-s....Amazing!

Enjoyed completely!!!

Thank you for this!!!

Take care!

Love,
*Devils*

P.s. err...nothing imp! ;)

 

OMG Dipsy,!!!!
Your os always makes me crazy 8-}
Heavenly bautiful os....

First of all, Thanks a lot for the dedication
Love you..... *HUG*

It was a big surprise for me....
I really loved it. :D
I loved Mayur as always...
Specially Mayank

The way you have written it, is really commandable job!
And I loved the teddy part , cutie pie teddies


You are an amazing writer,
Do keep writing....

Love you...
Ur sammy...

 

OMG Deeps, what was that???

Amazing OS... it was like a mini SS... starting with a lost and found friendship, cute pecks on the cheeks.,.. hidden feelings... unconfesed love... best friends moments together.. teasing, nautiness, coffee, maggi... and then the confession... everything is wririten fabulously...

And then came to romantic moments... first kiss.. blushing.. second kiss... passion... hot hot hot....

Loved the update...

thanks for the dedication... this was a surprise....loved it....

p.s. I do not like kids lying to their parents to meet the friends or sleepovers at boyfriend's.... these kind of things further breaks parent's trust.... sorry for my sincere opinion....

Love ya Deeps.....

 

omg that was an OutStanding OS.............
i just could imagine each and every part of it as if it was happening infront of my eyes
i loved each and every part of it
the first hug, the first cute peck.......
his cute way of refering her to a cutie teddy with chuppy cake cheeks.......ohh..... that was really fabulous.......... and i liked his teasing her for being caught of watching the passionate moment of lovers....
and then the 2min maggii description by nupur was amazing......
his sincere truthfull confession.......... her silent acceptence
and the first passionate moment in their lives
and he being romantic and she being stubborn to leave..........
the way he said 'how romantic, i want to leave' was awesome
and her night stay 'borrowed clothes' lol that was superb
and the hot hot kiss was romantic
and the morning was well described
hatsoff and thanks for giving us the best os on mayur

 

awww.....it touched me so much that u dedicated it to me also...thank u sooooo much.....really love you...

i completely agree that women are more open in virtual world....100% true....

aawwwwww....i loved the way he said she was exception....so beautiful...

she fooled her mother? lol...so nupurish....i agree....sometimes parents dictate a lot...thankfully my parents have no objection in allowing me to go anywhere....but i am an exception....i don't like going anywhere....too shy....and i have no such frd who is a boy...

parents trust their children.....but they dont trust the ones whom u r with...i think like this only....

Aww….he even kissed her on her cheeks…how sweet….i loved how he said that she was so cute…but I know how much it pains when someone pulls your cheeks *oww*

So she did felt something different…that's great….i love this Nupur yaar….modern yet conservative…I don't like touching…

Urgh! I so hate the shameless couples…agar pyaar hai toh itna show kyun karte ho? Yuk! Bechari Nupur…usne dekha bhi nahi aur uska naam bhi lag gaya!

She can never mind his kiss…she loves him na,…but he is so damn impossible…why not tell her or show that he too felt something?

By the way, I am having Maggie right now…and its really yummmm….i so love Maggie….it makes my mouth water…and I too finish it so fast…

Aawwww……so he loved her since that day? I wonder when will people start confessing without being afraid of anything!

She couldn't see all those things earlier becoz she never considered them ever….like I said in my "Kaisa Woh Pyaar Tha?" that she never understood his love becoz she never think that he cud love her….

She accepted him! He kissed her! Wow! I didn't expected this so soon…he wanted to hear…comeon…..when would girls learn to say those words ever?

Vaise…to be really truthful…I really love this shyness…

But it really pains when your frds or anyone pinches you right the moment when you pout….it really feels like ouch! I have to handle this torture everyday in my coaching….my frds so pull my cheeks and say the words "how cute" or "so sweet"…like these words are going to ease the pain! *pouts*

She lied again! And that too stayed up at Mayank's house? she is too much!

Oh man! He is so mischievous…I obviously didn't expected him to pull her and make her fall beneath him….he and his antics!

Lol….kissing needs air? I don't know about that…but ya, as much as I have read some stories…breathless they become…but here it made me laugh…

They shared the bed? Seems super fast….but then in love, you never know what you do…and I simply LOVED this oneshot…

The feelings were so beautifully described…..starting from the apartment to the confession and to the togetherness….

I loved how you described each and every emotion…..that's the thing I love the most in your oneshots….i told you that you a fab writer and I love your work….literally I loved this oneshot….

I must tell you that after so long….i have read something so beautiful….it was really a treat to my tired eyes…literally loved it….

THANK YOU sooooooooo much for writing this as well as dedicating it to me……really love you a LOT……literally…..i LOVE you a lot…

Too pretty and superbly written that I don't actually know what more to say…..

Keep writing such oneshots and do fill up my inbox with these pms…..i would love to check them out…

Loads of love,
Mahak

 

Deepika
It's absolutely brilliant. You write beautifully. this was such an awesome OS. Totally loved it. It was sweet, romantic and passionate.
Please do write more. i would love to read more of your work.

This was just beautiful.. :)

-Daania

 

oh.....it ended*DIES*......i wanted it to continue for ages ;;)
how can you write so well,dear......you write so idealistically not even a single thing was good,everything was marvellous!!!
loved it to bits especially
"I pushed him a little to let him know that I was breathless! Even the most passionate kissers need air and it was my second experience only!" =))it was AWESOME ;))
still in awe......can't help myself coming back to reality
thank you soooooooo much for writing it, writing it soooooooo beautifully *HUG*

 

Awwwwwwww deepa
awwwwwwwww i read ur OS now and wah wah what an OS
it was just mind-blowing
awesome
brilliantly written
mayurs were friend and maaynk love nupur frm 9th standard
but he was shuttered after knowing that nups is in relation with some one else.
but mayur r made for each other
no one can apart them
so in dono ko tou mil na he tha.
loved their sweet,cute , passionate kisses.
loved mayur totally
wonderful os
lovely
keep it up
do write more

 

Loved the OS....
my bad luck was that my current went twice while I was reading this OS when I had reached only a quarter of this OS...
But, I was so much in love with the first part that the "determined" me sat again to read this.....
And..... It was amazing...... I was smiling profusely while reading this..... You write so so so welll...... I loved every part of this OS....

Please Please write more....
Thanx for the pm...

- Pooja

 

It was a lovely OS deeps..it was just wonderful...one of the best i have read,,,
the feeling that the Os carried was more than just perfect...it was ethreal......
the entire journey was a romantic ride. .I love the idea of best friends turning lovers (for obvious reason s ;)) ...aah its actually the perfect way sometimes!! ) I really really really love the way u write, there is everything in there, humour...love..romance and reality...
fabulous fabulous fabulous..this will remain in my memory for long :)

 

heyy Deepika [ i guess, thats ur name ]
well...amazin job ..as alwayz
the concept was fab !!!..* standin ovation* n loved the way story moved ahead !!
i loved the first part of their frnd-ship...all naughty-heated frndship n gr8 side of mayank been shown ...the witty one ;)

n then the coffee with free-scne ahead.. tooo good !!!
the cheek-peck was amazin' .....which made nupur to think abt ''them''...awwww...!!!
loved the way mayank was pullin her leg on watchin the free-show...!!! wowwao....hehehe...cool one and poor nupur , she didnt evn realise that she z missin that live show ...awww...!!

then came the confession with maggie noodle...great re ..!! n the sweet kiss was amazin'

well..she z takin Ruchi's support to cum to mayank...hehehehe...
i was actually glad when i read m name.,..hahahaha :D :D :D..
i culd connect more.,..
then the sleep-over ...cool one along with the kiss !! :) :)

in short...'
dhansuuu update dear !!!!.....
amazin'

love
ruchi :)

PS : are u from chandigarh ??

 

hey deepika,

awwe it was so sweet...lovely...romantic...awesome...
ahh i'm rendered speechless

i could imagine each n evrythng so very clearly...!!!...
truly yaar u described the feelings so truly !!
i'm in love with this os of urs !!

take care,
fatima

 

Hey Deeps for this OS i really love you dear
and really sorry
first thing i am too late in reply
second i thought you forgot me
but i was wrong sweety you didn't and i am again sorry for thinking this
I must not say thanks ,but can't stop saying for dedication
I hope you will not mind [ i know i broke the rule]
Now cut to update Deeps
Loved there meeting after 3 years
and then the way nupur uses her tactics [funny]
so sweet teddy and pulling cheeks
Mayank is really too intelligend to give the justified answer " if we can watch them fight then we deserve all the rights to see them patching up too"
I agree with the Maggi adv that it doesn't even boil in too minutes he he he
Aur unka confession i am sorry no words to describe it at all
i read it full breathless condition ,his feelings for her and he did not leave a KASH in his life
Loved it
And most romantic pals "First and Second Kiss" wow [I am still dreaming Deeps]
He loved her without any condition and best thing he wanted to confess it F2F
not on e-media

Truely i fall in love again with your OS that i do always
and please do write more
Luv,
Di

 

awesome OS Deepika!
1st of all, thanking 4 PMing me this...& do add me 2 ur PM list....

coming 2 the story, a really sweet one!
Nupur lied 2 her parents 2 meet him??!! ahem ahem!
"it's scientifically proved that women are more extroverts in virtual world" true, damn true...
aww! the teddies thingy was cute!

lol! Mayank caught Mupur gawking shamelessly at a mushy mushy couple!
but the small peck Mayank gave her shows that silent gestures speak volumes!

i loved the way Mayank patiently & gradually unfolded his feelings 4 her...
"I… I need to leave"
lol! interesting reaction...

aha! Ruchi plays an imp. part here, tho indirectly....
& the ending lines were the best!

do write more soon buddy.....

 

Hey Deepika! *hug*
Thanks for the PM. If you haven't PMed me, I'd have never come across three wonderful OS! Thank you once again. :)

Firstly, Unfair or Fairy Tale?
That was just mind blowing. Aww... I so loved it. Nupur mistook the whole thing and got confused. Nice! It was a sweet ans simple OS.
Next, The Perfect Promise
I thoroughly loved reading this one. Nupur actually read the whole Chemistry thing only for Mayank? How sweeeeeeeeeeet! Nupur is too smart. She wore white because it was his fav colour. Interesting! Mayank's so sweet. He said her that he would actually teach how to dance. I wish he could teach me too. I'm a pathetic dancer! Loved the way you described the whole dance rehearsal. Loved the confession session. It's just awesome!
Finally, It Happened... And I'm Glad That It Did
This one's really very nice. These two had been friends from a long time and then Mayank started liking her but couldn't confess. That's sad. And then all of a sudden he confesses it, that's nice!
I agree with Jess, I absolutely don't like people who lie to their parents to meet their boyfriends or to do sleepovers at any guys place. Sorry, but that is what I felt. The rest all was superb!

 

Hey,

That was a wonderful OS! There is nothing more beautiful than a reunion of childhood sweethearts and your writing is very captivating. Do write more as I'm in love with your stories and the depth they have.

 

I LOVED D OS Deepika.itz brilliant.!!!2 good..i have never read smething as wonderful as dis...!!trust me when i say dis..i m damn serious.i loved evrything bout it-frm best of friends 2 finally becoming lovers, well,dats wht is expected though!!!d fbs,chats,friends,d third angle nisheet(i choose 2 call him dat,can't tolerate ne1 between my mayur),d realization dat he's d one for her,d smiles they shared,d leg-pulling,d moments shared btwn them,i loveddddd..... evrything of it..nd do i need 2 say it-u write amazingly!!!..d best writer now for me...d way u decribed both of their feelings n each n evry single sensation they felt bout each othr aftr getting together....
n do u know my most fav part-of course d whole os is wonderful like i said-but d next morning u know...i loved it..made me remember john donne's" the good morrow".being aliterature student,i relate evrything 2 evry single novel n poem,romantic ones whtever i read n it made me remember d poem by Donne...,u know-waking up after d love felt by both.though Mayur didn't cross limits ,but still-d realization d next morning of being his....was breathtakingly beautiful...loved it simply..d best....

 

Hey

First of all a BIG thanks for sending me the PM for this OS....
I swear gal u made me remind of soo many things ... U wnt believe but my friends too call me a teddy ... once my crazy frnd compared me with this stuffed toy and since then i have been teased like this... infact on teddy day (i guess near Vday it is ! ) my friends wished me...i was lyk shocked and laughed heartily before i went to kill them....

And there were small tit bits that made me remind of all my frnds ...gosh! i miss them........ ...and now coming to the main thing , i.e.. MN ...girl that was beautifully written ..loved it all.. .it was so sweet and cute... i luved their relationship ! Glad destiny gave them a chance to meet again..

This is surely one of the best fics on MN i have come across .. keep going gal...
btw, wats ur name?

Love ya loads
Vini

 

Hey Deepika!
so sorry for the late comments..
the OS is really nice...very realistic..i know many people who do the same..kinda reminded me of them..
especailly loved the mayur naughtiness..very cute!
the way they confronted each other was awesome!can easily imagine nupurs shock!
great going gal!!

 

Hi!
Sorry i couldn't reply earlier
I've been inactive for a week
Because of my stupid internet problems
The OS was too good like ur previous OSs
I really enjoyed it
Did i tell u ur my fav OS writer
I love all ur OSs!
This one was sooo excellent
It was amazing
The concept was great
and the OS was really well planned
It must have taken you such a long time
I can never write long parts like that
PleasePleasePlease write another one soon
I ReallyReallyReally want u to write a FF
Please think about it and PM when u write anything!
I'm a fan of ur writing!
LoveYou!
-Jassi

 

yay!!!! ur on india forums! ;))

ok lemme explain, my school blocks many sites, and when i want to read os and ff's i have to go to star.in b-( and this way i have read all ur one shots during my free time in school

and i loveeeee it!!

i just read "It happened" today in school, and i just wanted to tell u, its probably one of the most romantic Os ive read, i realllyyyy loved it! i was actually smiling to myself a lot, bcoz of ur Os ;)) :)
sooooo sweet and well written too, hehe, gr8, realistic ideas :)
write more please!!

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